Can I get My French Coach on Wii in the U.S.?

Are there any language coach games for Wii in U.S.?

Yes, to my amazement their actually is! Here is some data on it:

http://www.gamefaqs.com/console/wii/home/945800.html

It came out in Europe in 2007. So If you have an American Wii, you can’t play it.

Persuasive writing essay opening..Revise?

You know how you’re always telling me how I don’t get outside enough? And how I don’t get enough exercise? Well I have the perfect solution: Getting an Xbox 360 plus Kinect. I know what you’re thinking…How would getting another gaming system help you get more exercise? Well Kinect for the Xbox 360 allows you to be the controller so you’re moving your body the whole time your playing! Games such as Dance Central, EA sports Active 2.0, Zumba Fitness, The Biggest Loser: Ultimate Workout and a whole lot more games that will help me stay active.

This is a good start and you have a lot of good ideas promoting Xbox 360 with Kinect.

First, who is your audience? I would guess this is to one of your nagging parents. But to make this seem more professional try to avoid addressing the audience. Eliminate any “you” that is talking to the reader. For example, “I have often been told to get outside and exercise…” while agreeing with your audience “I agree and think it would be best if…”

Also, careful with “your” and “you’re”. And, your last sentence is an incomplete sentence.